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Post by Raven on Jan 30, 2011 17:50:59 GMT -8
BetrayalWhat does it truly mean to be a traitor?be·tray (be-tray) tr.v. be·trayed, be·tray·ing, be·trays 1a. To give aid or information to an enemy of; commit treason against 1b. To deliver into the hands of an enemy in violation of a trust or allegiance 2. To be false or disloyal to 3. To divulge in a breach of confidence 4. To make known unintentionally 6. To lead astray; deceive Table of ContentsPrologueChapter 1
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Post by Raven on Jan 30, 2011 17:57:17 GMT -8
Prologue
Most stories have a beginning and an end. My story has a beginning. But will it truly ever end? Will I ever escape the one thing worse than death? This, my friend, is a story of betrayal.
Like all good stories, mine starts at the beginning. This story starts way back when I was a kit. A life most would have been ashamed of, I can dimly remember being born into the life of a kittypet. My mother was a rouge; I don’t remember her pelt, her voice, or even her smell. I was too young to have the faintest memory of her.
But I do remember, on a cold leaf-bare night, mewling pitifully on an empty belly and with cold paws. My ear-tips were burning in frozen pain, and my paws were so numb that I didn’t even know I had any. There was a frigid blizzard blowing, and my pelt was soon white with snow. I don’t know how long my mother carried me through the blizzard. I lost track of time, and as young as I was, my eyes and ears were both shut off to the world. The world was a cruel, cold void of darkness and pain. That was my earliest memory, the frozen shards of ice slowly lapping up the last of my warmth.
My mother’s grip soon slackened, then finally faded. I was left on a slab of freezing but oddly smooth stone, my consciousness slowly fading. The last bit of the memory I can recall was a harsh, yellow light that I was able to somehow see, even with my eyelids closed. The pain of the ice shards digging into my pelt slowly ebbed, and the world became a numbing darkness.
I later concluded that my mother either abandoned me or died. Who knows where her spirit is now? My mother betrayed me, and it was only the first of many betrayals.
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Falling Star
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Post by Falling Star on Jan 30, 2011 17:57:48 GMT -8
The epicsauce is too much.... I can't stand it...
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Post by Familiar on Jan 30, 2011 17:57:54 GMT -8
Wow, Rae; looks great so far. I can't wait to see how Lunar's story progresses!
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Post by Knuckles|Pr3yLicous on Jan 30, 2011 17:59:30 GMT -8
That wasn't that good. D: But okay.
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Rose ツ
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Post by Rose ツ on Jan 30, 2011 18:02:26 GMT -8
That was amazing! I LOVE it!
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Post by Raven on Jan 30, 2011 18:03:15 GMT -8
@star: Thanks so much! Familiar: Thank you! @knux: What, in specific, was not good about it? You can't just say something is bad without a reason. xD Rose ツ: Thanks!
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Rose ツ
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Post by Rose ツ on Jan 30, 2011 18:06:13 GMT -8
No problem. When is the next chapter gonna be released?
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Post by Raven on Jan 30, 2011 18:08:16 GMT -8
Rose ツ: When I finish it, silly.
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Post by Rose ツ on Jan 30, 2011 18:36:35 GMT -8
Rose ツ: When I finish it, silly. Oh. So there is no certain release date?
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Post by Raven on Jan 30, 2011 19:21:03 GMT -8
Oh. So there is no certain release date? I may assign release dates for the chapters once I get more completed.
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Post by NinjaEspy on Jan 31, 2011 11:24:28 GMT -8
y u always post things when I'm not online ;nnnn;
I got a peek at it before |D and I love it grieagnag <3333333333333333333333333333
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Post by Knuckles|Pr3yLicous on Jan 31, 2011 13:54:57 GMT -8
I didn't like it cause it wasn't like good story making.
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Post by Rose ツ on Jan 31, 2011 14:46:49 GMT -8
I didn't like it cause it wasn't like good story making. Be more specific?
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Post by Knuckles|Pr3yLicous on Jan 31, 2011 14:52:14 GMT -8
Good beginning. THERE
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